Catching the signal from one of her friends, Angela brushed her skirt, took a deep breath and walked towards where he was sitting. She welcomed the cutie to her knew school and asked what his name was he said Brian and then Angela wanted to make sure hewas in her first pieriod and brian said Mrs. Weather angela let out a huge yelp to see his schedual and find out every other class she had he had she was exited to get to know him more to see were this will take them in the futer
I felt that you used realistic language, and you used a lot of telling!
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job. I liked how you didn't tell us the name of the boy.
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